Monday, 30 April 2012

Soldier Stories

Here are our unedited soldier stories. We were learning to write a short descriptive piece of writing to show some emotion.  We found it tricky putting ourselves into someone elses' shoes but we are pleased with how our writing turned out. Mrs A asked us to write a minimum of three sentences but some of us were on a roll and wrote more!  Please forgive our mistakes, as stated earlier this is unedited!

Boom went the bombs!
I can see lots of gun fire. Soldiers have been hit. Some are lying on the ground screaming in pain. Bleeding to death, the ground was covered in blood. It was so gross I wanted to swipe it out of my mind.    By Ashleigh
BOOM! Went the gun I heard the enemy coming closer to me, my heart was pumping.  I was as tiny as a mouse, I was scared in the corner. He found me.
He has trapped me.  I picked up my gun and shot the enemies as fast as a cheetah I was so scared, but I did it anyway. I feel so much better.  I rescued everyone else.  I got a medal.        By Danielle
Kaboom!!! Its coming my way pieces of shrapnel that’s in my face whatch out before you get hit in the back, it will be sore like yesterday.  By Harley

KA BOOM! another bomb exploded! I want to run somewhere where no one can find me, but where?  I am terrified and exhausted. I really want to get out of here.   By Jameel
It was freezing outside.  I wish I was at home. Guns shooting at people.  Some soldiers have been hit by the bullets.  My friends have died.    By Jessie L
KABOOM!!  Exploding heads flying in the air wounded men starting to die. Plane’s  everywhere  flying in the sky dropping bombs all over us but . By Jessie S
BOOM!!! Our enemy was coming closer and closer. I hid and  was as quiet as a mouse. My heart was pumping really fast I was frozen in fear.  He was close but he couldn’t see me, he heard me and he started searching for me. I grabbed my rifle and I shot him.  By VJ
I felt water dripping from head to toe it was like ice-cubes falling down my back. Thunder storms every where. KA BOOM!!! Aircraft dropping bombs everywhere. You wouldn’t believe your eyes if you were here.  I want to get out of this place.   By Jonathon
Kaboom!!! I’m tying up my lace. Pieces of shrapnel is in my space. Watch out before it hits your face. I’m on the chase. By Kingston
Ka boom!  Blood splats everywhere, I felt so sad for my friends because they all got shot. As I was shooting I got angry like a bull getting teased.   By Kini
Boom went the bombs, I was freezing .  I wanted to run away, so I did.  I ran where no one, I mean no one, could ever find me. I saw a good hiding spot when I was running. I ran there and then there were bombs over there and here. I was tired and I wanted to go home.  By Maia
BOOM! Went the guns I heard the enemy was coming closer, my heart better fast and fast.  By Maraea
I was freezing. I wish I was back home with my family and friends. It was sad because my mate died. I was going back to bass but I saw bodies every were. By Meagan
 
BANG! Traces flying around us. SLOP!!!Another soldier died, the Soldiers is scared and defeated by. What they are seeing Soldiers were firing bullets at the Turkish army up on the slippery wet mountains above us.   By Navuga
Boom all the bodies spread around me it felt so horrible it was like hell. I WANTED TO GO HOME.ALL THE BULLETS WENT PAST ME AS I saw the dead bodies.  By Rhys



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